How do you like this book im writing? here is a snippet.?

I was tired, I'd just finished hanging out with ma crew and I was all set to chillax at my pad! I started walkin' to my pad when I saw my main man Cameron Dizzle, "what up mofo!!" he shouted from across the street. A few homebois gave him some evils "Daaaamn, *****" he shouted at them "I'll pop a cap in yo *** if you gives me them looks again bois".... what do you think of the style? remeniscent of a young Charles ens? thats what my mum said anyway